Evaluation for Question #8582

Failed to parse evaluation data as JSON: Syntax error. Content: { "score": "5", "overall_comment": "The essay presents a basic discussion of the topic, addressing both sides of the issue. However, the ideas are not well-developed, and there are numerous grammatical and lexical errors that affect clarity and coherence. The writer attempts to provide an opinion, but it is not clearly articulated or supported with strong arguments.", "task_response": { "score": "5", "comment": "The essay addresses the task by discussing both views, but the arguments are not well-developed or supported with relevant examples. The opinion is not clearly stated, and the conclusion lacks a definitive stance. The response could benefit from a clearer structure and more detailed arguments." }, "coherence_cohesion": { "score": "5", "comment": "The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the ideas within paragraphs are not logically organized, and there is a lack of clear progression. The use of cohesive devices is limited, leading to abrupt transitions between ideas." }, "lexical_resource": { "score": "5", "comment": "The essay demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary with several inaccuracies ('essence of doing business', 'bias', 'healines', 'exert a pull'). There is some repetition, and word choice is occasionally inappropriate, affecting clarity and precision." }, "grammatical_accuracy": { "score": "5", "comment": "The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues, incorrect verb forms, and sentence fragments. These errors detract from the readability of the essay and sometimes obscure meaning. A wider range of grammatical structures could improve the score." }, "feedback_by_paragraphs": { "introduction": { "content": "Nowadays, it is common for leaders of organizations to receive higher salaries than the employees. While some consider this essence of doing business, others argue that this is bias. In recent years, it has become common for various occupation to ofer substantially income for personel holding leadership positions than their subordinates.", "feedback": "The introduction presents the topic and indicates both sides of the argument. However, it contains several lexical and grammatical errors, affecting clarity. The thesis statement is unclear and lacks a clear opinion." }, "body_paragraph_1": { "content": "On the one hand, it is true that there is a big difference in paying salaries regarding their effort time and passionate contribution. For instance, CEOs of Apples (achieve more than 10 fold than their employees who earn 15-20 dollars) often make healine about high salaries and huge benefit packages including bonus and company's shares, which could amount to millions of US dollar. In contrast, the average of ordinary workers typically range from … per year. This is unrealistic because the group of people holding important positions do not pay more efforts than other employees. As everyone can just have 24 hours a day and have to work at least 8 hours which means unequally. As a result, this is not fair to every people in the company for what they have to put in.", "feedback": "The paragraph attempts to argue against higher salaries for directors but lacks clarity and coherence. The example provided is not well-integrated, and there are numerous grammar and vocabulary errors. The argument is not fully developed, and some claims lack evidence." }, "body_paragraph_2": { "content": "On the other hand, giving high salaries can be a good opportunity for peoples who take over the leader position and stimulate others to follow by. Therefore, they have to be more responsible in working environment. This is because directors have invest a large number of money which is shares in big companies. The success, achievements, and failure will be determined by them as the organization goes bankrupt, it will affect on other peoples. As a result, they play an important role and dramatically more pivotal. As for the later, their appearance can be the reason for attracting talents.", "feedback": "The paragraph presents an argument in favor of high salaries for directors but lacks logical structure and coherence. The points are not clearly connected, and the reasoning is vague. There are grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that obscure meaning." }, "conclusion": { "content": "High pay means that employees should work more harder and their contributions are deserved with rewarded. It is the key factor to retain workers. Increasing competition with each others exert a pull on higly skilled professional. Since, big companies are more and more sustainable.", "feedback": "The conclusion is brief and lacks a clear restatement of the opinion. The ideas are not well-connected to the main arguments presented in the body paragraphs. There are grammatical errors and the conclusion does not effectively summarize the discussion or present a clear opinion."