Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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5.5
Overall Band
6
Task Response
5
Coherence
5
Lexical
5
Grammar
The essay presents a balanced view on the responsibility of environmental protection, discussing both the role of governments and individuals. However, there are significant issues with grammar, coherence, and lexical resources that detract from the clarity and persuasiveness of the arguments. The essay could benefit from more precise language use and a clearer structure.
The essay addresses the task by discussing both sides of the argument and providing a personal opinion. However, the arguments are not fully developed or supported with specific examples. The conclusion attempts to summarize the main points but lacks a strong, clear statement of the writer's opinion.
The essay lacks clear organization, with ideas not always logically connected. Some sentences are difficult to follow due to awkward phrasing. Paragraphing is used, but transitions between ideas and paragraphs are not always smooth, affecting the overall coherence.
The essay demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary, with several spelling errors and inappropriate word choices. There is some repetition of words and phrases, and the essay lacks the precision and variety needed for a higher score.
The essay contains numerous grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, incorrect verb forms, and sentence fragments. These errors often obscure meaning and reduce the overall readability of the essay. There is limited use of complex sentence structures.
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Question:
Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Introduction
In recent years, there has been alarming in environmental pollution, leading people to claim that the authorities have the largest responsibility in fixing these prohems However, opponents of this view argue that individuals are the main cause of nature pollution This essay will discuss both sides and analyze my opinion.
The introduction outlines the main topic and expresses an intention to discuss both sides. However, it contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'alarming in environmental pollution' and 'prohems.' The thesis statement could be clearer.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, some claim that government should be in charge of dealing with pollution might point to authorities's ability. The fact is that government has organized various project which seriously impacts the environment. Thus, solely individuals can not causeit by themselves. To be specific, the government may intervene in nature by operating industrial facilities or applying unsuitable laws enforcement. It is more bad effect of government to increase pollution. In addition, the authorities can take advantage in global support among countries. As environmental pollution is the similar problems in the whole world, closely nations can help to tackle with this problem through finding sources, sharing technological advancement which improves the status of enviroment in country.
This paragraph attempts to argue for the role of government in environmental protection but is hindered by unclear and awkward phrasing. There are several grammatical errors and vague statements that need further elaboration and support.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand, it is undeniable that the whole community has contributed negatively to the nature, leading people are the main reason in pollution. By changing lifestyles, human can contribute their effort in enviroment and gradually lessen pollution. Moreover, the responsibility of human in tackling with this problem is a basic task of everyone, as people got the same lives.
This paragraph presents the argument for individual responsibility but lacks depth and specific examples. The grammar issues and lack of clarity weaken the argument. The phrase 'as people got the same lives' is particularly unclear and needs rephrasing.
Conclusion
In conclusion, while both view are reasonable, I believe that environmetal problems should be handled by both levels, while governments can create policies and facilities for major changes individuals
The conclusion attempts to summarize the essay's main points but ends abruptly and lacks a clear restatement of the opinion. There are grammatical errors, and the final sentence is incomplete, affecting the overall impact of the conclusion.
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