Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Task Response
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Coherence
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Lexical
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The essay presents a partial agreement with the statement and provides some arguments on both sides. However, there are issues with clarity, coherence, and grammar that affect the overall quality. The task response is somewhat addressed, but the arguments are not fully developed or clearly articulated.
The essay attempts to address the task by discussing the role of both politicians and individuals in environmental protection. However, the argument lacks depth and clarity. The points are not sufficiently developed or supported with specific examples. The conclusion is somewhat unclear and does not effectively summarize the arguments presented.
The essay structure is present with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the ideas within paragraphs are not well linked, and transitions between sentences and paragraphs are weak. The essay lacks clear progression and logical flow of ideas.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and inaccuracies. There are attempts to use more complex vocabulary, but these are often incorrect or awkwardly expressed. Lexical choices sometimes hinder clarity and precision.
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. These errors negatively impact readability and comprehension. There is limited use of complex sentence structures.
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Question:
Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Introduction
Nowadays, environmental problems might mostly be created by vehicles and people. Some people argue that the nation should have the power to change the issues while others believe that the most problem might belong to individuals. From my point of view, i partly agree with this opinion.
The introduction presents the topic but lacks clarity and precision in defining the scope of the essay. The thesis statement is vague and does not clearly state the extent of agreement or disagreement.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, it can be clearly that the nation might have a huge power to solve the environmental issues. First of all, it can be seen that a mount of transportation of products might leaded to the emission and reduce the oxygen in the environment. The government can decline the issue by encourage the citizens using public transportation and increase the tax of having private vehicle. Moreover, they also could create the campaign for people to having a green space by reducing plastic, having more and more frees.
The paragraph attempts to discuss the role of the government but lacks clarity and coherence. There are several grammatical errors and awkward expressions. The argument is not fully developed or supported with specific examples.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand, individuals might play an vital role in destroy the environment because of a small action such as building a number of tower in the city and destroy the habitant of animals. Moreover, people who live in the countryside might lack of information to protect the environment, and the consequences that people having a negative action to the habitant. For example, in rural they might cut the trees down to build a house or using for their privacy. However, individuals also the mainly might protect the world by their own actions if they have enough knowledge by access the information and understand how the environment was important to them.
The paragraph discusses the role of individuals but lacks coherence and clarity. There are numerous grammatical errors and unclear expressions. The points are not well linked, and the argument is not fully developed.
Conclusion
To sum up. the nation play an important role to slove the environmental issues by using their own power and the individuals might not the fault that lead to enviromental issues
The conclusion is brief and lacks clarity. It does not effectively summarize the main points or clearly state a final position. There are grammatical errors that affect understanding.
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