Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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The essay addresses the task by discussing both the positive economic effects and negative social effects of advertisements. However, it lacks clarity and coherence throughout. The vocabulary is limited, with frequent spelling errors, and the grammar is often incorrect. The essay requires significant improvements in organization, language use, and accuracy.
The essay discusses both views on the effects of advertisements, which is what the task requires. However, the explanations are unclear, and the writer's opinion is not clearly expressed. The ideas are not fully developed or supported with clear examples.
There is a lack of logical flow in the essay. The ideas are not well-organized, and transitions between sentences and paragraphs are weak. The essay does not have clear paragraphing, contributing to its lack of coherence.
The vocabulary used is very limited and often incorrect. There are many spelling mistakes and inappropriate word choices, which obscure the meaning. The essay lacks the range of vocabulary needed to clearly express ideas.
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay, including incorrect verb forms, subject-verb agreement errors, and sentence fragments. These errors significantly impact the readability and clarity of the essay.
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Question:
Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Introduction
advertisements have been recoginse in around world some people think That advertisments to have postitive economic effects but some peoples Still think there are negatie soudu effets because in do'viduous are not sati skied with whe They are and what they have I will give Discuss and give my may own opinion about both views.
The introduction attempts to present the two viewpoints, but it is poorly structured and contains numerous spelling and grammatical errors. The thesis statement is unclear.
Body paragraph 1
Yes advertisements have positive economic effects. First, ad vertisemers inr. In traduce in troduce their produces To The peoples make them wout To have Them That include large of a maint of money will came to The com pony Thar also they have to pay more takes for goverment motke That boost economic on Seto seccondly, This effects also gain some w reward for the peoples, some advertisements are said about hunger, homeless child, To ask donation from a peoples crowd The world, HR
The paragraph discusses potential positive economic effects but lacks clarity and coherence. Ideas are not fully developed or logically connected. There are significant spelling and grammatical errors.
Body paragraph 2
However, some peoples Think there are negative social effects. First, Fake produck or expering product this make peoples make um pappy due to the adver ismers said that it will help you you on To Kill your deads Kin,... Secondly, gamble, aduts content are makong parents when They let their kid Using Their Techology, For ear dexomple, Pop up That many peoples have saw it bexore, The content That They give Just gamble with a hot model when you IT & Jury Shaw up out of no Where hadke people revig Frustion. Finally, bad products shoes, bags, shirrs, ave may Things Ther you wants to houve
The paragraph attempts to address negative social effects but is difficult to understand due to poor grammar and spelling. The points made lack clear explanation and logical sequence. Examples provided are vague and not well-explained.
Conclusion
in con alusion, adversteveres have some positive economic effets but also still have some negative effects
The conclusion is very brief and does not effectively summarize the main points or provide a clear opinion. The language is incorrect, affecting the clarity of the message.
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