Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Overall Band
4
Task Response
3
Coherence
3
Lexical
3
Grammar
The essay attempts to address the task but falls short in several areas, including coherence, cohesion, grammatical accuracy, and lexical resource. The ideas are not well-organized, and the response is difficult to follow due to numerous language errors.
The essay addresses both views to some extent but lacks clear and developed arguments. The opinion is not clearly stated, and the response is difficult to understand due to language issues. There is limited analysis of the points mentioned.
The essay lacks a logical structure. Ideas are not clearly linked, and there is little use of cohesive devices to help guide the reader through the argument. The flow of the essay is disrupted by frequent errors and abrupt transitions.
The essay demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary with many errors in word choice and spelling. The vocabulary used is often inappropriate or incorrect, which affects the clarity and precision of the ideas expressed.
The essay contains numerous grammatical errors that hinder understanding. Sentence structures are often incorrect, and there is a lack of control over basic grammar. These issues significantly affect the readability of the essay.
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Question:
Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Introduction
advertisements have been recoginse in around world some people think That advertisments to have postitive economic effects but some peoples Still think there are negatie soudu effets because in do'viduous are not sati skied with whe They are and what they have I will give Discuss and give my may own opinion about both views.
The introduction attempts to introduce the topic but is marred by numerous grammatical errors and unclear language. It lacks a clear thesis statement outlining the writer's opinion.
Body paragraph 1
Yes advertisements have positive economic effects. First, ad vertisemers inr. In traduce in troduce their produces To The peoples make them wout To have Them That include large of a maint of money will came to The com pony Thar also they have to pay more takes for goverment motke That boost economic on Seto seccondly, This effects also gain some w reward for the peoples, some advertisements are said about hunger, homeless child, To ask donation from a peoples crowd The world, HR
This paragraph attempts to highlight the positive economic effects of advertisements but is difficult to follow due to language errors. The points made are not well-developed or supported with evidence. The connection between ideas is unclear.
Body paragraph 2
However, some peoples Think there are negative social effects. First, Fake produck or expering product this make peoples make um pappy due to the adver ismers said that it will help you you on To Kill your deads Kin,... Secondly, gamble, aduts content are makong parents when They let their kid Using Their Techology, For ear dexomple, Pop up That many peoples have saw it bexore, The content That They give Just gamble with a hot model when you IT & Jury Shaw up out of no Where hadke people revig Frustion. Finally, bad products shoes, bags, shirrs, ave may Things Ther you wants to houve
This paragraph presents some points about the negative social effects of advertisements but is severely undermined by language inaccuracies. The points are not clearly articulated, and the paragraph lacks coherence.
Conclusion
in con alusion, adversteveres have some positive economic effets but also still have some negative effects
The conclusion attempts to summarize the essay, but it is too brief and lacks a clear restatement of the main points. It fails to effectively conclude the discussion or reiterate the writer's opinion.
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