Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Task Response
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4
Lexical
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The essay presents some ideas relevant to the task, but it is difficult to understand due to numerous grammatical errors, spelling mistakes, and unclear structure. The arguments are not well-developed, and the essay lacks coherence and cohesion.
The essay attempts to discuss both views of the issue regarding the economic and social effects of advertisements. However, the arguments are not clearly presented or supported with specific examples. The writer's opinion is not clearly stated or justified.
The essay lacks a clear structure, making it difficult to follow the writer's line of thought. Paragraphing is inadequate, and there are no clear topic sentences. The flow of ideas is disrupted by frequent grammatical errors and unclear expressions.
The essay demonstrates limited vocabulary, with frequent spelling mistakes and inappropriate word choices. There is some use of topic-related vocabulary, but overall, the lexical resource is insufficient to convey precise meaning.
The essay contains numerous grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms, sentence fragments, and punctuation errors. These mistakes significantly hinder comprehension and the overall readability of the essay.
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Question:
Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Introduction
advertisements have been recoginse in around world some people think That advertisments to have positive economic effects but some peoples Still think there are negatie soudu effets because in da'viduous are not sati skied with whe They are and what They have I will give Discuss and give my may own opinion about both views.
The introduction attempts to present the topic but is cluttered with spelling and grammatical errors. It lacks a clear thesis statement and does not effectively outline the structure of the essay.
Body paragraph 1
Yes advertisemen's hare positive economic effects. First, ad vertisemers inr. In traduce introduce Their produces To The peoples make them To have Them That include large of amount of money will came to The company Thar also they have to pay more takes for goverment That boost economic on secondly, This effects also gain some reward for these peoples, some advertisements are said about hunger, homeless child, To ask donation from a peoples crowd The world, HR
This paragraph attempts to discuss the positive economic effects of advertisements but lacks coherence and clarity. The points are not well-developed, and the examples are vague. Grammatical errors further obscure the intended meaning.
Body paragraph 2
However, some peoples Think there are negative social effects. First, Fake product expiring product this make peoples make um pappy due to the advertisement said that it will help How you On To Kill your makong parents when They let their kid Using Their Techology, For ear dexomple, Pop up That many peoples have saw it bexore, The content That They give Just gamble with a hot model when you IT & Jury Shaw up out of no Where hadke people revig Frustion. Finally, bad products shoes, bags, shirrs, ave may Things there you wants to have So said it very warm, clean, make 100% from coton, but when you have it, is all different .
The second body paragraph addresses the negative social effects but is confusing and lacks clear argumentation. The examples provided are unclear and irrelevant at times. The paragraph is riddled with errors, making it difficult to understand the points being made.
Conclusion
in conclusion have some positive economic effects but also still have some negative effects
The conclusion is brief and does not effectively summarize the main points or provide a clear opinion. It fails to offer any insight or resolution to the discussion presented in the essay.
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