Evaluation for Question #8613

Failed to parse evaluation data as JSON: Control character error, possibly incorrectly encoded. Content: { "score": "4", "overall_comment": "The essay presents an attempt to discuss both views on the effects of advertisements, but it lacks clarity and organization. The arguments for each side are not fully developed, and the writer's opinion is not clearly articulated. The essay contains several grammatical errors, awkward phrasing, and informal language, which detracts from the overall readability. Improved structure, clearer argumentation, and more accurate language use would enhance the essay significantly.", "task_response": { "score": "4", "comment": "The essay addresses both sides of the argument but fails to develop the points fully or clearly. The writer's opinion is briefly mentioned but lacks depth and support. The discussion does not effectively evaluate the positive economic effects versus the negative social effects. More detailed examples and clearer reasoning are needed to strengthen the task response." }, "coherence_cohesion": { "score": "4", "comment": "The essay lacks clear organization and logical progression of ideas. The introduction does not clearly outline the essay's structure, and transitions between paragraphs are weak. The essay would benefit from clearer paragraphing and more cohesive devices to guide the reader through the arguments." }, "lexical_resource": { "score": "4", "comment": "The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary, and there are several instances of incorrect word choice and informal language. There is a lack of precise and varied vocabulary to fully convey the arguments. Expanding the lexical resource and ensuring accuracy would improve the essay." }, "grammatical_accuracy": { "score": "4", "comment": "There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay, including incorrect verb forms, subject-verb agreement issues, and awkward sentence structures. These errors impede the clarity of the essay. More attention to grammatical accuracy and complex sentence structures is needed." }, "feedback_by_paragraphs": { "introduction": { "content": "Advertisement are becoming more popular right now, beside of the population,it is due to some positive or negative effect .some people are not actually satisfied with those adverts, some find it funny to watch or create their benefits", "feedback": "The introduction is unclear and lacks a clear thesis statement. It introduces the topic but does not clearly outline the main points that will be discussed. A more structured introduction with a clear thesis would set a better foundation for the essay." }, "body_paragraph_1": { "content": "In one hand, advertisement will have many benefit for promoting the product, it is more nessesary to people to find the product that they need. The biggest benefit of advertising is for companies to promote the product,make more money although the advertisement cost a large amount of money. On the site of people, advertise can make it easier to choose a product, it promote the advantage of the product, with a reasonable price, and it has been confirmed by many people and viewer, buyer can make an optimal decision easier. For instance, so many reviewer post a videos to promote their experience on youtube, the videos that have the highest views and the most liked will take on the first place of the search, people will find it easier because they already have someone to use the product first and share the experience to them.", "feedback": "This paragraph attempts to discuss the benefits of advertisements but lacks coherence and clarity. The points are not fully developed, and there is a lack of clear examples. The language is informal, and there are several grammatical errors. More structure and refined language are needed." }, "body_paragraph_2": { "content": "In the other hand, the negative impact it depend on the time that the advert show up. For example, people are watching fil and the advert just randomly come out, it take like thirdty of twenty second to skip, for me it a little bit to long for advertisement. Advertisement is not thats worse but is need the right time to come out. If is just come out normally on the start or the end of the film or video, it is not anoy at all but it come out like a jumpscare in the middle of the film and stop the mood of the film", "feedback": "This paragraph mentions the negative effects of advertisements but is poorly organized and lacks clear examples. The language is informal, and there are multiple grammatical errors. The argument would benefit from clearer examples and a more formal tone." }, "conclusion": { "content": "In my opinion advertisement it not bad, but is only worth it when people need it. If it just come out in the middle of the film, that make the advert can not promote the product because people do not actually watch it if they are watching film. When people need something, they will consistently find it, they do not actually need the advertisement