Evaluation for Question #8613

Failed to parse evaluation data as JSON: Control character error, possibly incorrectly encoded. Content: { "score": "5.5", "overall_comment": "The essay addresses the task by discussing both views and providing an opinion. However, it lacks clarity and precision in language, leading to confusion in some parts. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings that affect the quality of the essay. The coherence and cohesion could be improved by better structuring of ideas and clearer connections between sentences and paragraphs.", "task_response": { "score": "6", "comment": "The essay addresses both views and provides an opinion. However, the argument in favor of advertisements is not as well developed as the one against them. The opinion is stated, but it could be more explicitly supported by evidence or examples. The discussion could be more balanced." }, "coherence_cohesion": { "score": "5", "comment": "The essay lacks clear logical progression in some areas, making it difficult to follow the writer's line of reasoning. Transition words are used, but not always effectively. The connections between ideas and paragraphs could be clearer." }, "lexical_resource": { "score": "5", "comment": "The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some attempts at more complex words, which are often used incorrectly or awkwardly. There are also several spelling errors and incorrect word forms." }, "grammatical_accuracy": { "score": "5", "comment": "There are frequent grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms, subject-verb agreement issues, and article misuse. Sentence structures are often awkward, which affects the clarity of the writing." }, "feedback_by_paragraphs": { "introduction": { "content": "There are some individuals suggest that advertisements offer several merits regarding to economy while other individual assume that it has several demerits in term of society as a consequence of individuals' dissatisfaction with themselves and their achievements. I perceived that advertisement's merits are overshadow its demerits.", "feedback": "The introduction presents the main argument and states an opinion. However, there are grammatical errors, such as 'regarding to' instead of 'regarding', 'in term' instead of 'in terms', and 'are overshadow' should be 'overshadow'." }, "body_paragraph_1": { "content": "On the one hand, it is undoubted that advertisement campaigns affects the society profoundly in a negative way. One of the adverse effect of it is that it creates a mass dissatisfaction for individuals. Since the advent of fashion or beuty advertisements, it intentionally create a beauty standard forsociety scale.Thus, a large number of individuals feel dissatisfied about their looking themselves and promote them to purchase the products. Furthermore, advertisements simultaneously affects individuals' dissatisfaction with what they have been achieved. This is due to the fact that advertisements create a lot of encouragements for consumers to buy its products by releasing product's function and efficiency, exaggerating its products in order to manipulate customer's curiosity and make them less satisfied about that what they have accomplished. For example, Apple annually release new iphones with its cutting-edge technology and innovation initiatives to its customer with the aim of increasing their sale. Accordingly, Apple's strategy has foster a huge demand for customer, making them feel less fulfilled about their curren phone.", "feedback": "This paragraph presents the negative view of advertisements. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement ('affects' should be 'affect'), pluralization ('effect' should be 'effects'), and awkward phrasing ('looking themselves'). The example about Apple is relevant but could be more clearly connected to the argument." }, "body_paragraph_2": { "content": "On the other hand, advertisement’s positive impacts are more popular crucial compare to its overexaggerated adverse impacts. One of its significant merits is that it contributes significantly to social economy. As the demands for marketing or selling is consistently rising, owing to the advent of advertisements, people are able to access to a wide range of products to purchase. This merit also be said an increase of a small company’s sale or an enterprise. Another merit is that it is capable of promoting the products more internationally which contribute to the entire nation’s economy. The advent of the advertisements in special event such as world cup or Olympic can considered to attract a numerous number of foreign visitor across the world, which increase the country’s economy and other possibly aspects.", "feedback": "This paragraph attempts to discuss the positive effects of advertisements. However, the language is often unclear and there are numerous grammatical errors. Phrases like 'more popular crucial' and 'overexaggerated adverse impacts' are awkward. The merit of international promotion is relevant but could be expressed more clearly." }, "conclusion": { "content": "In conclusion, while advertisements have several negative