Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Overall Band
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Task Response
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Coherence
3
Lexical
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The essay attempts to address the topic but struggles significantly with coherence, clarity, and language accuracy. There are numerous grammatical errors, spelling mistakes, and issues with sentence structure that hinder comprehension. The essay lacks clear organization, making it difficult to distinguish between different points of view and the writer's personal opinion.
The essay makes an attempt to discuss both the positive economic effects and the negative social effects of advertisements. However, the arguments are not well-developed or clearly explained. The writer's opinion is not clearly stated, and there is insufficient support for the points made. There is a lack of depth in the discussion, and the response does not sufficiently cover the task requirements.
The essay lacks a clear and logical structure. There is no clear division between paragraphs, and ideas are not presented in a coherent manner. The transitions between ideas are abrupt and confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. The essay needs better paragraphing and clearer linkage between ideas.
The essay demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary with frequent spelling errors and inappropriate word choices. There is an attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, but it is often used inaccurately. The limited vocabulary affects the clarity and precision of the essay.
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay, including issues with subject-verb agreement, verb forms, punctuation, and sentence structure. These errors significantly impede understanding and suggest a basic level of grammatical knowledge. The essay requires significant improvement in grammatical accuracy.
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Question:
Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Introduction
advertisements have been recoginse in around world some people think That advertisments to have positive economic effects but some peoples Still think there are negatie soudu effets because in da'viduous are not sati skied with whe They are and what They have I will give Discuss and give my may own opinion about both views.
The introduction is unclear and contains multiple spelling and grammatical errors. It does not effectively introduce the topic or outline the main points that will be discussed. The thesis statement is vague and lacks clarity.
Body paragraph 1
Yes advertisemen's hare positive economic effects. First, ad vertisemers inr. In traduce introduce Their produces To The peoples make them To have Them That include large of amount of money will came to The company Thar also they have to pay more takes for goverment That boost economic on secondly, This effects also gain some reward for these peoples, some advertisements are said about hunger, homeless child, To ask donation from a peoples crowd The world, HR
This paragraph attempts to discuss the positive economic effects of advertisements but is poorly organized and difficult to understand. Key points are not clearly explained, and there is a lack of coherence. Grammatical errors and awkward phrasing further hinder comprehension.
Body paragraph 2
However, some peoples Think there are negative social effects. First, Fake product expiring product this make peoples make um pappy due to the advertisement said that it will help How you On To Kill your making parents when They let their kid Using Their Techology, For ear example, Pop up That many peoples have saw it before, The content That They give Just gamble with . Finally, bad products shoes, bags, shirrs, ave may Things there you wants to have So said it very warm, clean, make 100% from coton, but when you have it, is all different.
This paragraph addresses the negative social effects but is incoherent and filled with irrelevant or confusing ideas. There are numerous grammatical mistakes, and the examples provided do not effectively support the points being made. The paragraph requires significant revision for clarity and coherence.
Conclusion
in conclusion have some positive economic effects but also still have some negative effects
The conclusion is very brief and does not effectively summarize the main points discussed in the essay. It fails to provide a clear final opinion or insight into the topic. The conclusion should be expanded to reinforce the arguments made in the body paragraphs.
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