Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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The essay attempts to address the task but is hindered by numerous language errors and a lack of clear structure. The arguments for both views are presented, but the discussion is vague and lacks depth. The writer's opinion is not clearly expressed.
The essay addresses the task by attempting to discuss both views and providing an opinion. However, the arguments are not well-developed, and the writer's position is not clearly stated. The ideas presented are too general and lack examples or evidence to support them.
The essay lacks clear structure and organization. There is no clear distinction between paragraphs, and ideas are not logically connected. Transition signals are missing, making it difficult to follow the writer's line of thought.
The essay demonstrates limited vocabulary and frequent errors in word choice and spelling. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to clearly express ideas, and many terms are misused or misspelled, affecting clarity.
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay, including incorrect verb forms, sentence structure errors, and punctuation mistakes. These errors hinder comprehension and make the text difficult to read.
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Question:
Some people think advertisements may have positive economic effects whereas others think there are negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Introduction
advertisements have been recoginse in around world some people think That advertisments to have positive economic effects but some peoples Still think there are negatie soudu effets because in da'viduous are not sati skied with whe They are and what They have I will give Discuss and give my may own opinion about both views.
The introduction attempts to introduce the topic but is poorly written with numerous spelling and grammatical errors. The thesis statement is unclear, and the writer's opinion is not clearly stated.
Body paragraph 1
Yes advertisemen's hare positive economic effects. First, ad vertisemers inr. In traduce introduce Their produces To The peoples make them To have Them That include large of amount of money will came to The company Thar also they have to pay more takes for goverment That boost economic on secondly, This effects also gain some reward for these peoples, some advertisements are said about hunger, homeless child, To ask donation from a peoples crowd The world, HR
This paragraph attempts to explain the positive economic effects of advertisements but is poorly structured and contains many language errors. Ideas are not clearly expressed, and the paragraph lacks coherence and depth.
Body paragraph 2
However, some peoples Think there are negative social effects. First, Fake product expiring product this make peoples make um pappy due to the advertisement said that it will help How you On To Kill your making parents when They let their kid Using Their Techology, For ear example, Pop up That many peoples have saw it before, The content That They give Just gamble with . Finally, bad products shoes, bags, shirrs, ave may Things there you wants to have So said it very warm, clean, make 100% from coton, but when you have it, is all different.
This paragraph attempts to discuss the negative social effects of advertisements but is very difficult to understand due to numerous language errors and a lack of clarity. The ideas are not well-developed, and the paragraph lacks logical flow.
Conclusion
in conclusion have some positive economic effects but also still have some negative effects
The conclusion is too brief and does not effectively summarize the main points of the essay. It fails to restate the writer's opinion clearly, and the language is simplistic.
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