Evaluation for Question #8613

Failed to parse evaluation data as JSON: Control character error, possibly incorrectly encoded. Content: { "score": "5.5", "overall_comment": "The essay presents a discussion on both sides of the argument regarding the impact of advertisements. While it addresses the task, the essay is marked by frequent grammatical errors and lacks coherence and cohesion. The lexical resource is adequate, but there are some inaccuracies and repetitions. The argument could be better organized for clarity.", "task_response": { "score": "6", "comment": "The essay addresses both views of the argument as required by the task and provides an opinion. However, the reasoning is not thoroughly developed, and the arguments could be more deeply explored to enhance the response." }, "coherence_cohesion": { "score": "5", "comment": "The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, there are issues with coherence and logical flow. Ideas are not always clearly connected, and transitions between sentences and paragraphs could be smoother." }, "lexical_resource": { "score": "6", "comment": "The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and awkward expressions (e.g., 'advertisements simultaneously affects'). Repetitions such as 'merits' and 'dissatisfaction' could be improved by using synonyms or varying expressions." }, "grammatical_accuracy": { "score": "5", "comment": "There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay, including incorrect verb forms and agreements, punctuation errors, and sentence fragments. These errors affect the readability and overall effectiveness of the essay." }, "feedback_by_paragraphs": { "introduction": { "content": "There are some individuals suggest that advertisements offer several merits regarding to economy while other individual assume that it has several demerits in term of society as a consequence of individuals' dissatisfaction with themselves and their achievements. I perceived that advertisement's merits are overshadow its demerits.", "feedback": "The introduction presents both sides of the argument and gives the writer's opinion. However, it includes grammatical inaccuracies ('regarding to economy', 'in term of society') and should be clearer and more concise." }, "body_paragraph_1": { "content": "On the one hand, it is undoubted that advertisement campaigns affects the society profoundly in a negative way. by creating a mass dissatisfaction for individuals. Fashion or beuty advertisements intentionally create a beauty standard forsociety scale.Thus, many individuals feel dissatisfied about their looking themselves and promote them to purchase the products. Furthermore, advertisements simultaneously affects individuals' dissatisfaction with what they have been achieved. This is because advertisements create a lot of encouragements for consumers to buy its products by releasing product's function and efficiency, exaggerating its products in order to manipulate customer's curiosity and make them less satisfied about that what they have accomplished. For example, Apple annually release new iphones with the aim of increasing their sale. Accordingly, Apple's strategy has foster a huge demand for customer, making them feel less fulfilled about their curren phone.", "feedback": "This paragraph discusses the negative impacts of advertisements. It contains relevant ideas but suffers from grammatical errors ('affects the society', 'forsociety scale'), spelling mistakes ('beuty', 'curren'), and awkward phrasing ('dissatisfied about their looking themselves'). The argument could be better structured." }, "body_paragraph_2": { "content": "On the other hand, advertisement’s positive impacts are more popular crucial compare to its overexaggerated adverse impacts. One benefit is that it contributes significantly to social economy. As the demands for marketing or selling is consistently rising, owing to the advent of advertisements, people are able to access to a wide range of products to purchase. This merit also be said an increase of a small company’s sale or an enterprise. Another merit is that it is capable of promoting the products more internationally which contribute to the entire nation’s economy. The advent of the advertisements in special event such as world cup or Olympic can considered to attract a numerous number of foreign visitor across the world, which increase the country’s economy and other possibly aspects.", "feedback": "This paragraph outlines the positive effects of advertisements. It is coherent but includes grammatical mistakes ('compare to', 'can considered') and lacks clarity in some arguments. The example provided is relevant but could be better integrated." }, "conclusion": { "content": "In conclusion, while advertisements have several negative effect regarding to society such as creating a beauty standard or exaggerate the products which make people feel dissatisfied, I suggest that the advertisement's positive aspects are overshadow its negative aspects.", "feedback": "The conclusion summarizes the main points and reiterates the writer’s opinion. It is concise but contains grammatical errors ('negative effect regarding to society', 'are overshadow') and could