Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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5.5
Overall Band
6
Task Response
5
Coherence
5
Lexical
5
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The essay attempts to address the task but lacks depth in the argumentation. The ideas are somewhat relevant to the question, but there is a need for more clarity and logical development. The essay's coherence is hampered by occasional awkward phrasing and structural weaknesses. Lexical resources are limited with noticeable repetition and errors. Grammatical inaccuracies further affect the clarity and fluency of the writing.
The task is addressed, and a position is stated. However, the argument lacks depth and is not fully developed. The essay could benefit from more detailed examples and explanations to fully justify the position. A counterargument is moderately addressed but lacks thorough exploration.
The essay has basic paragraphing and some linking words, but the cohesion is weak in places. Ideas are not always logically connected, and there are abrupt transitions. The introduction and conclusion are present but are not effectively tied to the body paragraphs, leading to a less coherent argument.
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several attempts to use less common lexical items, but these are often inaccurately used. There is a need for greater variety and precision in word choice to effectively convey the arguments.
There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, and sentence structures. These errors sometimes obscure meaning and reduce the overall readability of the essay. Greater grammatical accuracy and range are needed.
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Question:
Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Introduction
In recent years, big organizations thinks they should paid higher salaries to importants positions than common workers. I totally agree with this statement and I will give the reasons.
The introduction presents the main viewpoint but contains grammatical errors such as 'thinks' instead of 'think' and 'paid' instead of 'pay.' The phrase 'importants positions' is incorrect. A clearer thesis statement would enhance the introduction.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, higher positions mean important effect to the organizations. People is holding great positions like CEOs or directors can drive the companies economy, help improve the quality, and boost the business income. For example, most decisions and negotiations that affect the companys life get approved by the employees with high authority. That means they are the core of the organizations structure. Although they may not work as hard as common or normal employees, they definitely giving risky or great decisions for the companys development. In addition, the salaries worth the high skills and the impact that they make for the business prosperity.
This paragraph attempts to justify higher salaries for executives but includes several grammatical errors, such as 'People is' and 'companies economy.' The paragraph lacks clear examples and explanations to convincingly support the argument. The idea that higher positions don't work as hard is inadequately explored.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand, common workers get lower paid feel inequally is not a strange things. They put more efforts and more time, keep the discipline at the highest, help hold the company at balance. As long as they are doing their duty, their given jobs, they would think they should get promotions and better salaries. Moreover, they could not have the potential to make important decision that have a big impact to the organizations. Without the given commands from the higher levels, they would not know the way to support the business.
This paragraph introduces a counterargument but lacks clarity and depth. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'get lower paid feel inequally' and 'a strange things.' The argument about the role of common workers is underdeveloped and could benefit from more specific examples or insights.
Conclusion
Having looked at both sides, we can see the impact from people holding greater authority are better than common employees. Therefore, I could not agree more with statement that big organizations should pay higher salaries for important positions.
The conclusion restates the position but lacks a strong summary of the main points discussed. The sentence structure is awkward, and the phrase 'are better than common employees' is vague. A more concise and clear conclusion would strengthen the essay.
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