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7
Overall Band
7
Task Response
7
Coherence
7
Lexical
7
Grammar
The essay provides a clear and accurate description of the trends in the line graph, effectively summarizing the data and offering insights into the changes in passenger numbers for different modes of transport. The analysis is logical, and the essay is well-structured. However, there are minor issues in vocabulary range and grammatical accuracy that could be improved.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and provides a clear overview of the trends shown in the graph. The writer interprets the data accurately, identifying key features and making comparisons where necessary. However, the conclusion could be more explicitly related to the reasons behind the trends observed, which would enhance the task response further.
The essay is well-organized, with a logical progression of ideas and effective use of cohesive devices. Each paragraph has a clear focus, contributing to a coherent overall argument. However, the use of linking words and phrases could be more varied to enhance the cohesion between ideas.
The writer demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses it with some precision. There is an attempt to use less common lexical items, such as 'ridership' and 'green transportation.' However, there are repetitive phrases, and the vocabulary could be further expanded to show a wider range of lexical resource.
The essay displays a good range of grammatical structures with a high level of accuracy. There are some minor errors, such as incorrect preposition usage, but these do not impede understanding. The writer could vary sentence structures more to demonstrate a higher level of grammatical range.
Detailed Analysis by Paragraph
Question:
Introduction
The provided line graph illustrates the monthly passenger numbers for four different modes of transport within a European city from 1980 to 2030.
The introduction effectively introduces the graph and sets the context for the essay. It could be improved by including a brief mention of the overall trends observed in the data.
Body paragraph 1
Overall, it can be seen that subways consistently had the highest ridership throughout the period, with a notable increase, particularly after 2020. Tram ridership showed steady growth, surpassing bus usage by 2030. In contrast, bus ridership declined overall, while bike-share, introduced in 2000, experienced the smallest ridership but showed consistent growth.
This paragraph provides a clear summary of the trends for each mode of transport. It effectively highlights key points and trends. Consider adding more specific data points to support the observations.
Body paragraph 2
Looking at the trends, subway usage began at 2.5 million commuters in 1980 and remained relatively stable until 1990. It then experienced a gradual increase, reaching 3.5 million by 2010 and remaining at that level for the following decade before a significant surge to 4.5 million by 2030. Tram ridership started at a modest 0.4 million in 1980 and showed a steady upward trend throughout the entire period, culminating at 2 million commuters by 2030. In contrast, bus usage began higher than the tram, at 1.6 million in 1980, but experienced a gradual decline over the five decades, ending at approximately 0.8 million in 2030.
This paragraph provides detailed data analysis and effectively highlights the contrasting trends between subway, tram, and bus ridership. The information is clear and logically organized, though it could benefit from more varied sentence structures.
Conclusion
The bike-share program was introduced in 2000 with a very low ridership of around 0.2 million. However, it demonstrated consistent growth in the subsequent decades, reaching 0.6 million by 2020 and further increasing to 1 million by 2030. This indicates a growing adoption of bike-sharing as a mode of green transportation in the metropolitan area, although its overall usage remained significantly lower than the subway and eventually the tram by the end of the observed period.
The conclusion effectively summarizes the trend for bike-share and draws a reasonable inference about green transportation. However, a more explicit link to potential reasons for the trends observed throughout the essay would strengthen this section.
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