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5
Overall Band
5
Task Response
5
Coherence
5
Lexical
4
Grammar
The essay attempts to describe a line graph but lacks clarity and coherence in its explanation. The language used is often inaccurate, and there are numerous grammatical errors that impede understanding. The essay partially addresses the task but lacks depth and clear analysis.
The essay provides a general description of the line graph, mentioning trends and comparing data between regions. However, it lacks specific data points, clear comparison, and fails to fully cover the task requirements. There is also some repetition and inconsistencies in the descriptions.
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but transitions are often unclear or absent, making it difficult to follow the argument. Some sentences are disjointed, and ideas are not always logically connected. The overall structure needs improvement for better clarity.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with frequent inaccuracies. Some words are used incorrectly, and there is repetition of phrases. Greater variety and precision in word choice is needed to convey the information more effectively.
There are numerous grammatical errors throughout the essay, including incorrect verb forms, subject-verb agreement issues, and awkward phrasing. These errors hinder comprehension and need to be addressed for clearer communication.
Detailed Analysis by Paragraph
Question:
Introduction
The line graph illustrates how many international pupils studying at a Canadian College between 1995 and 2015.
The introduction is very brief and lacks detail. It should include an overview of the main trends and provide a clearer introduction to the data being described.
Body paragraph 1
Overall, there was an ascending trend was observed in the number of students who was in Africa and Europe while the contrast was true for the others. In addition, the highest figure was consistently ranked for the data in Africa throughout the period but the lowest rank was experienced in those in South America. Moreover, individuals who took part in that College from Asia remained unchanged.
This paragraph attempts to summarize the trends but contains several grammatical errors and unclear phrasing. The comparison between different regions is not well articulated, and the information could be more clearly presented.
Body paragraph 2
From 1995 to 2005, the number of people who studied at Canada University from Asia and South America was witnessed a downward trend. To be specific, the data for Asia decreased slowly around 56 to 53 numbers and individuals from South America went down approximately 53 to 51 ones. On the other hand, it was clear that the figure for Europe and Africa was considered as a upwarding trajectory. Pupils who came from Africa was increased vigorously, with nearly 47 to over a half of 100 people while those in Europe stayed remain at 50 students.
This paragraph provides some data but is not entirely accurate or clear. The use of numbers is confusing, and there are several grammatical issues. The explanation of trends is not consistent, and the comparison between regions needs to be more precise.
Conclusion
The essay lacks a proper conclusion. A conclusion should summarize the main points and provide a final perspective on the data presented.
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