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4.0
Overall Band
4.0
Task Response
4.0
Coherence
4.0
Lexical
4.0
Grammar
The essay provides a basic description of changes in the number of overseas students from different regions over time. However, it lacks clarity, detailed analysis, and proper organization. The language used is often unclear, and grammatical errors are frequent, affecting the overall readability and coherence of the essay.
The essay attempts to address the task by discussing changes in the number of overseas students from different regions. However, it lacks a clear central argument or position and does not provide sufficient detail or analysis. The task response is also hindered by a lack of clarity and coherence.
The essay lacks clear organization and logical progression. The paragraphs are not well-developed, and transitions between ideas are weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited, and the overall structure is confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument.
The vocabulary used in the essay is basic and lacks variety. There are several errors in word choice and form, which detract from the clarity of the essay. There is a limited range of vocabulary, and more precise and varied language is needed to improve the lexical resource.
The essay contains numerous grammatical errors, including incorrect verb tenses, subject-verb agreement issues, and sentence fragments. The grammatical errors significantly impact the readability and clarity of the essay. A wider range of grammatical structures with greater accuracy is needed.
Detailed Analysis by Paragraph
Question:
Introduction
Over 20 years, the overseas students at a Canadian University have significantly changed. The number started from 1995 to 2015 with a lot of fluctuations
The introduction is vague and lacks a clear thesis statement. It provides a general idea of the topic but does not clearly outline what the essay will discuss.
Body paragraph 1
Overall, the number of student had a sharply changed in each year including 4 countries namely Asia, Africa, Europe and South America
This paragraph lacks coherence and specificity. It fails to provide detailed information about the changes in student numbers and does not clearly link back to the introduction.
Body paragraph 2
First of all, the African student begin with less than 50 students to nearly 150 students after 20 years, the number of Africa did not change much, after that the Asia student did not get changed too much with more than 50 students in 20 years
The paragraph attempts to describe changes in student numbers but lacks clarity and accuracy. The information is presented in a confusing manner, and there are grammatical errors that hinder understanding.
Conclusion
to conclusion, the numbers had changed for 20 years with the lead of African students
The conclusion is weak and does not effectively summarize the main points of the essay. It also introduces new information, which is not appropriate for a concluding paragraph.
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