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7
Overall Band
7
Task Response
7
Coherence
7
Lexical
6
Grammar
The essay provides a clear response to the task, presenting a strong argument in favor of the internet as the most important invention. It is well-organized and coherent, but there are some areas where clarity and grammatical range could be improved.
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position that the internet is the most important invention. It presents relevant examples and reasons to support this view. However, the argument could be further developed with more depth and additional examples.
The essay is logically organized with clear progression of ideas. Each paragraph has a clear central topic. However, some transitional phrases could be improved for better flow, and the conclusion could summarize the main points more effectively.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary with some precise word choices. However, there are occasional awkward phrases and repetitions. More varied use of synonyms and complex vocabulary could enhance the lexical resource.
The essay shows a good range of grammatical structures, but there are some errors and awkward constructions, such as 'access to those educational resources' or 'may also educate people in some case.' Improving sentence structures and reducing errors would enhance the grammatical accuracy.
Detailed Analysis by Paragraph
Question:
Evaluate this IELTS Writing Task 2 answer
Introduction
There is no doubt that the internet plays a crucial role in human development. While some believe that there have been many inventions in human history, namely the wheel, others have faith that the most significant thing is the internet. I strongly agree with the latter, and in this essay, I am going to present my own opinion.
The introduction clearly states the topic and the writer's position. However, the mention of 'namely the wheel' could be better integrated into the sentence for clarity.
Body paragraph 1
The most significant thing is that the internet has revolutionized global communication, such as instant messaging, video calls and so on. In the past, it took a lot of time, even months, to send a letter overseas but nowadays, things are becoming easier. People can communicate immediately with anyone around the world with some tools like messages, email, and social media. This allows people to connect and become closer together which enables international collaboration.
This paragraph effectively highlights the impact of the internet on communication. However, it could be improved by providing more specific examples or statistics to support the claims.
Body paragraph 2
Another benefit is that the internet provides unprecedented access to information and knowledge globally. As we can see that in earlier centuries, knowledge was limited in schools and books but now people can easily access to those educational resources, news, and videos through online websites. This gives people who don't have the ability to pay for their tuition fees a chance to study which reduces inequality in education.
The paragraph presents a strong argument about access to information. Some phrasing, such as 'access to those educational resources,' could be more concise. Additional examples could further strengthen the argument.
Conclusion
In conclusion, while foundational inventions like the wheel were important to human progress, I strongly believe that the most important thing is the internet due to its widespread influence in connecting people from all around the world through the tools they created, accessibility to educational sources and may also educate people in some case.
The conclusion reiterates the main argument but could be improved by more clearly summarizing the key points discussed in the essay. The phrase 'may also educate people in some case' is unclear and should be rephrased for clarity.
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